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Worth Fighting ForI lie face down, clawing at the ground in frustration, getting dirt in my nails. I keep my sobs muffled out of fear of attracting further attention while internally reproaching myself for being afraid. I haven’t even courage to make up for my lack of power.   
But I am scared. His ravenous victory grin was the most frightening thing I’ve ever seen. His is a smile that only appears when others fall, when he is standing taller than them. It could never be as pretty or as heart-warming as yours. I refused to meet the gazes of any of his gang members, my former friends. I didn’t want to decode their expressions.  &nb Worth Fighting For
by *ToaAkatsuki
VoicelessThis is a story about a dead man. It would undoubtedly be much better told from the subject’s point of view, but that is unfortunately impossible, for the dead do not speak, only float in a separate world, detached from reality. As of such, I have taken the narrator’s role upon myself, feeling, for some inexplicable reason, very alive.   
He closes the door behind him as he leaves his neglected studio apartment, fitting the key into the slot mechanically. His disinterested eyes follow the turning of his wrist without seeing his pale, cracked skin. I lack photoreceptive organs, but I see. I see the world in all its hues, an Voiceless
by *ToaAkatsuki
July HaikuthonJuly 1st   
 
bouncing   
the ball’s in your court  and swiftly bouncing away  from the playing field   
 
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July 2nd   
 
spider   
a spider scurries  off your palm and on your wall  with its seven legs   
 
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July 3rd   
 
cellular workers   
human brains tend to  
lay off employees who aren’t  constantly working   
 
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July 4th   
 
turn the page   
when i turn the page  a fresh papercut July Haikuthon
by *ToaAkatsuki
Worth a Thousand WordsThere’s little point to moving from one urban area to another. Same atmosphere, same feel. Strangers walk around with the same damn look on their faces. If only the street signs could be in some other language or something. But I’m still using the same currency and society still functions the same way. Sure, it provides fresh subject for my photographs, but it’s not like I had been running out before. I tell you, I’d much rather be in the country. Nature makes for good, captivating photographs. There’s nothing particularly interesting to see here.   
“That’s not true. There’s history. Things h Worth a Thousand Words
by *ToaAkatsuki
Newest is most often BEST. X)
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When I Was Young   
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When I was young, time merged together like mist on the mountains. Life was free and without a care, because I didn’t have this heavy burden on my shoulders.  
 
It weighs me down and I’ll never be free of it, never.  
 
When I was young, the flowers still bloomed in bright colors, but now everything’s faded to a dull pastel set. Life will never be the same, not after that.  
 
That.   
I can see you in front of me now, asking me what’s that, but I can’t tell you. If I tell you the last remnants of my fragile world will collapse arou
When I Was Young
by *Silvaz

Aww, now I'm annoyed cause you won't tell me what that is. Come on, couldn't the narrator have let it slip? Haha, no, ...

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Timmy blinked. As the retinal burn faded, he tried to figure out what the light could've been. A simple "old man" ornament wouldn't have glinted so brilliantly, and he was sure Mr. Bumbry wouldn't have kept jewellery on display... As the boy thought about it more and more, he became more and more curious. He pushed himself up from off the floor and crouched carefully. He then shuffled over to the window to the side of the door. He paused for a moment. Should he really be creeping round? Peering into windows and nosing around the place? Yes he should, he decided... He'd likely lost his job anyway because of the old man; what else could he do t
Golden Curtain
by *Whothehellisthat

Ehehe. The emphasis at the end makes me wonder if Timmy's afraid of the dark or something. But whoa! Why would Bumbry do that? A...

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A cutesy cartoon dog anthropomorhically walks onto the screen from the left. He whistles a happy tune and his head bobs to the beat. Eventually, he comes across a cat, lying curled up on the floor.   
He pauses.   
Looks at the camera. A few bubbles pop into existence and finally a larger one. The scene plays out in his head:  "He pulls a stick of TNT already lit from off frame. He throws it at the cat. The cat explodes into a puff of smoke. And when the smoke clears is no longer there."   
POP   
The thought bubble blinks out of existence; out of the dogs mind.  And he continues his saun
POP: Prologue
by *Whothehellisthat

Maybe I'm just bored, but since you told me you don't usually do prose, I wondered what you usually write. Well, isn't...

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Mr. Bumbry seemed to know everyone in the town. "He had connections" as people say. Once, he managed to close all the schools on his birthday. Another time, he got the mayor to make a speech saying how wonderful he was on the local news... But just a week ago, he used his "gift" to put the paper boy out of business. He simply picked up the phone to the chief editor of the newspaper and had him relieved of duty. No reason given; no questions asked.  This made the new paper boy nervous. It was the first day of Timmy's new round, and each door felt like a new hurdle. Was he doing it right? Was he letting the letter flap down gently enough?
Golden Silence
by *Whothehellisthat

What a funny old man. Poor paper boy. xD I like this. It's not directly related to the last part, but this Mr. Bumbry's trai...

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Hello.

Thu Jul 16, 2009, 7:41 PM
  • Mood: Insecure
  • Listening to: Diamonds for Tears - Poets of the Fall
  • Reading: No Logo - Naomi Klein
  • Playing: MapleStory (lvl 27 haha)
No haiku today. Shush, I'll catch up.

But I wrote a poem today. I actually really like it. I'll be polishing it a bit more though. :) But I like it, so yayyy. :aww:

and. and and and.

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remember this? I need you. To tell me. What you think the theme of that is. And drop some critique while you're at it.

It's not that I even really like the piece. It's not awesome. I think it's iffy.

But it's not POINTLESS. D: Come onnnn. Tell me. There has to be a theme, right? I'm not just a horribly morbid child, right? I write about interesting/relevent issues, right?

I don't want to be one of those writer's who have great styles but no subjects. :|

I don't know. My Muse ran off somewhere. I don't even know where. And I'm okay with that, but she better bring me back a good souvenir, or I might as well quit. >.<

...

I get discouraged so easily. xD

Naw, I wouldn't be able to quit writing if I WANTED to. =P

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rawr.

Devious Info

  • Interests: Writing(poetry/short stories), Music, Drawing(badly), Anime/Manga(XD)...
  • Favourite band or musician: Death Cab for Cutie, Yuki Kajiura, KOTOKO, Kawada Mami, Evanescence, Poets of the Fall
  • Favourite genre of music: Symphonic Metal, J-Pop, J-Rock, Techno
  • Favourite poet or writer: Long List.
  • Operating System: Vista
  • MP3 player of choice: my PHONE :D (I need a decent mp3 player...)
  • Wallpaper of choice: Eh... anything that looks cool. Normally anime.
  • Favourite game: Assassin's Creed, BIOSHOCK - I like shooters
  • Favourite gaming platform: XBOX360 (honestly? it's all I have)
  • Favourite cartoon character: Kirika Yumura(Noir), Kino(Kino no Tabi), and Chikane(KnM). The list actually goes on.
  • Personal Quote: Live, and let live.
  • Tools of the Trade: Pen, Looseleaf, Laptop ^_~

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*Silvaz:iconSilvaz:
MEEP.
Thu Jul 16, 2009, 8:24 PM
*ToaAkatsuki:iconToaAkatsuki:
WHAT UP?! :D
Mon Jul 13, 2009, 6:22 PM
~Mystic-Viper:iconMystic-Viper:
HI THERE.
Sun Jul 12, 2009, 7:03 PM
*ToaAkatsuki:iconToaAkatsuki:
..hello?
Sun Jul 12, 2009, 4:55 PM

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~happymo:iconhappymo: 19 minutes 49 seconds ago
Hey, I was wondering sense I see that you are doing a bunch of critiques, if you might be able to critique some of my work. You are an awesome writer, and I like opinions on my work.

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Be inspired: *simplypoetry and *simplyprose

"I took my love down to violet hill
There we sat in snow
All that time she was silent still
So if you love me
Won't you let me know? "
~ "Violet hill", Coldplay
*brassteeth:iconbrassteeth: 5 hours 54 minutes ago
Thanks for the fave!

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
Mood: Joy *AsylumWitch:iconAsylumWitch: 1 day 7 hours ago
Congratulations :winner: on winning the Magical Muse Contest
hosted by :iconscarlettletters:

You have been featured in my journal here [link]

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:blackrose: "Some days it's just not worth chewing through the restraints."
*ToaAkatsuki:iconToaAkatsuki: 1 day 5 hours ago
Thank you! :aww:

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The world is not beautiful; therefore it is. ~ Kino no Tabi

~ShortStackStories
~Amaranth-Portal
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*AsylumWitch:iconAsylumWitch: 1 day 4 hours ago
You're welcome. :heart:

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:blackrose: "Some days it's just not worth chewing through the restraints."
~sunkissedsakura:iconsunkissedsakura: 2 days 9 hours ago
:iconsunkissedsakura::iconfaveplz::iconpetplz:

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"I think gay marriage should be between one man and one woman," -Arnold Schwarzenegger
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I :heart: pugs! [link]
*ToaAkatsuki:iconToaAkatsuki: 2 days 5 hours ago
welcome! :)

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The world is not beautiful; therefore it is. ~ Kino no Tabi

~ShortStackStories
~Amaranth-Portal
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~Satah:iconSatah: 4 days 4 hours ago
thanks for the fav on and you thought that scar was from a facelift ♥

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when one candle is used to light another, the new flame is not the same as the old flame, and yet the first flame directly causes the second.
*ToaAkatsuki:iconToaAkatsuki: 4 days 3 hours ago
you're welcome :aww:

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The world is not beautiful; therefore it is. ~ Kino no Tabi

~ShortStackStories
~Amaranth-Portal
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